??First Kiss??
Response to Mechanically Inclined
I am positive this piece will not be called First Kiss, but it is describing that first kiss experience. This piece is nowhere near completion, but I wanted to add it in as a reflection of ideas stemming from Mechanically Inclined. I have used ideas from our sacred writing time to continue to work on this piece of writing.
1st Draft
After writing my first draft, I workied with changing tenses, sentence combining, and using a colon instead of a comma.
2nd Draft
Revision Ideas from a Writing Partner
3rd Draft
The third draft of this piece includes changes that I made from Mechanically Inclined lessons. There is evidence here of adding prepositional phrases for more description, removal of pronouns, and the addition of a dash!